*Revising as re-seeing your work
- Revising is the most important step in the writing process
- Revising will improve your writing
- Revising is the process of working out the thesis and structural suport of your essay.
- Revising helps you to see the whole persepective, concerns, and analyzes your points, support, and /or organization
- May have to put alot of revision into the work.
- Need to be open-minded in order to become a better revisor.
- During, the rough draft focuson the big picture issues first start with the whole then work on the details of your writing.
*Practice Peer Review
- Also called "workshopping"
- Workshopping is a group of peers providing constructive critism
- Peer review has two purposes
- It gives critism for the draft.
- Improves you as a reader and writer
- Feedback helps in many differnt ways
*Revision Stratigies
- Reread the assignment prompt to start out with
- create a list of weaknesses and strengths, write, what should be worked on and which should be left alone
*Revision To Make Your Audience and Purpose Clear
-The introduction sets the tone for the rest of the writing.
-The writing should have a clear audiance
-The writing should be considerate to the audiance.
*Revising to Recognise an Essay
-If you dont plan before the writing you will have a poor rough draft.
-When revising be ready to make fixs and improvements
-Essays should be neat and organized on a two level form, though the overall and within each paragraph
-If it is messy, try another approach to create a more logical, order, oragnized writing.
-Some steps to reorganize the writing, step 1; is to make a list of your paragraph topics or points, step 2: evaluate the leftovers. Step 6: return to the document on your computer.
*Revising to Reorganize a Pargraph
-When revising it is important to keep new information organized throughout the important writing
-Focus on the main point, and start from there.
-Connect the rapport with main point to make a clear essay
-Go over transitions make the transitions clean and oragnized. Evaluate the transitions.
*Revising for Paragraph Development
- The objective for the body paragraph is to support the thesis
- Every body paragraph should have a point and topic sentence with information that supports the main point
*Revising to Intergrate qoutations and Paraphrases
-When using a qoutation in your essay you should allways make sure the reader knows where it is coming from.
-The qoutation should be like a sandwhich involves: introducing the question, copy the exact words of the reader where you recieved the information for the quote.
-Allways introduce the qoutation to help the reader have a clear understanding
-To introduce use a signal phrase, or introductory words, and use the last name of the author.
-formula for a full-introduction signal phrase for the first mention of an author in your essay: full title of work(book or article)+ full name of author+signal a phrase word+qoute.
*Explain what the Qoutation Means
-Readers interpret the qoute differntly, provide good information to help the readers know what the qoutation means.
*Explain how the qoutation Support your Point
- Explain why the Qoute was introduced it into the essay
*Editing Stratigies
- Realization that revising take effort and time
- Dont go overboard revising, loosen up.
*Revising your Essay Outloud
- Reading outloud is effective
- 5 step process to reading outloud. Step 1 print a copy of your paper and grab a pencil or pen. Step 2: Read your paper outloud. Step 3: When you finish reading the whole document go back and focus on those underlined parts. Step 4: Edit your document on the computer. Step 5: Repeat step 1-4 untill your paper sounds great.
*Reading Backwards
-also a highly effective strategy for revision.
-step one: choose your most serious error. Step 2: Print your essay and also find a black piece of paper. Step 3: turn to the last page of your essay. Step 4: read the essay, one structural at a time, back to front. Step 6: take a break between passes so you are allways looking at your essay fresh. Step 7 repeat the steps with your next most serious error and thus the next.
*Proofreading
-proofreading the final for revising and includes, going through grammar and spelling error or minor details.
Monday, September 22, 2014
Descriptive Writing Exercise
1She was depressed.
I noticed a woman who was in her late fourtys. The woman was wearing all black. The woman had her head all the way down. her body seem to droop as if life was sucked right out of her chest and abdamens. Also the elder lady walked really slow as if all her energy had been tooken from her from a long work out. The lady seemed to have no motivation to do anything. She seemed hopelesswith no strength left in her body, mind, or spirit.
2The car was nice
The dark blue, black, and energy red Hummer second edition was a very nice looking car. In the inside of the car it was very luxuriuos and had high tech technolog. The inside was black and had sections of white as if it was so sophisticated. The hummer had two sets of twelve hundred watt subwoofers in the back that made the ground move like an earthquake. The Hummer was capable of going six hundred miles per hour or faster. The Hummer although always seemed to be missing something.
I noticed a woman who was in her late fourtys. The woman was wearing all black. The woman had her head all the way down. her body seem to droop as if life was sucked right out of her chest and abdamens. Also the elder lady walked really slow as if all her energy had been tooken from her from a long work out. The lady seemed to have no motivation to do anything. She seemed hopelesswith no strength left in her body, mind, or spirit.
2The car was nice
The dark blue, black, and energy red Hummer second edition was a very nice looking car. In the inside of the car it was very luxuriuos and had high tech technolog. The inside was black and had sections of white as if it was so sophisticated. The hummer had two sets of twelve hundred watt subwoofers in the back that made the ground move like an earthquake. The Hummer was capable of going six hundred miles per hour or faster. The Hummer although always seemed to be missing something.
Saturday, September 13, 2014
List ten of sedaris tics or habits and try to establish some general rules that make them tics and not more sociallh acceptable repeated motions or habits
Sedaris tics and habits are outragously not socially acceptable. Ten of sadarises tics and habits include licking, pressing, wiping, against many not okay objects inside of house, outside of his house, at school. Sadaris also has a uncontrollable need to constantly satisfy thes habits throughout his young life. Sadaris also has a consistant bad habit that goes all throughout to his college years of rocking in his bed and listening to his music. The objects sadari licks throughout his young life as in elementary school include licking light switches, mailboxes, leaves, grass, lightbulbs, outside poles, and licking corners of a metal desk. Other insane tics are touching forehead with shoe or heel, touching windshield with nose, touching desk eight times with nose, and touching the doorknob seven times with each elbow. The habits and or tics that can be considered more or less socially acceptable is the rocking in bed with music, stabbing an outlet with a butter knife and getting up from desk twenty eight times. These are more socially acceptable to my opinion because they are not ridiculous. Typically children during his age, when asked or told not to do something it makes them want to do it more. So the stabbing an outlet with a butter knife can be socially accepted. Also at the age of 5-12 or during elementary school kids have a lot of energy, so sitting still or just sitting typically is asking too much. The rocking in bed while listening to music may just be how he responds to the music he is listening to.
2What are some tics and habits that you have? Are they more socially acceptable than Sedaris? Why do you think that is?
The tics and habits that I have include messing with my hair, spending money on random stuff, cleaning up around the house, drinking lots of water, biting my nails, cleaning my shoes, and buying louis pizza. My habits are more socially acceptable than sedaris. My habits are because compared to licking everything, my habits should be more socially accetable. I think that my habits are more socially acceptable because they have a norm. For instance biting nails is a habit that you can see on daily basis. I think a couple of my habits can be socially unacceptable because less people do it. An example of this would include buying louis pizza. Im not completely sure of this but I assume theirs not a wole lot of people out their who order louis pizza and chezybread like I do. Some of my habits may not actually be habits. These habits or tics are cleaning my shoes, cleaning my apartment, and drinking lots of water. These would be considered not a habit unless I do these habits too much.
3What do you think the point of the essay is to describe and inform the readers Sedaris tics and habits. Also I think the writers point was to describe and inform the readers of his parents, where he lives and the habits in elementary school, middle school, high school, and college. The entire story was about his tics and habits. The name of the story was a plaque of tics. So you can allready assume that the story has to do something with tics. Some examples are on page 8 which says, "It was a short distance from the school to our rented house, no more than six hundred and thirty-seven steps, and on a good day I could make the trip in an pausing every few feet to tongue a mailbox or touch whichever single leaf or blade of grass demanded my attention." When the writer was describing where he lived and where he was living previously, and was describing on page 9 of a plague of tics. The writing says, "I didnt remember things being this way back north. Our family had been transferred from Endicott, New York to Raleigh, North Caralina." For when Sedaris was in elemantary school his habits and tics were mostly licking things. Sedaris and his teacher had a conversation about his licking of the light switch." The purpose of the writing was and inform the readers of Sedaris habits and tics.
Sedaris tics and habits are outragously not socially acceptable. Ten of sadarises tics and habits include licking, pressing, wiping, against many not okay objects inside of house, outside of his house, at school. Sadaris also has a uncontrollable need to constantly satisfy thes habits throughout his young life. Sadaris also has a consistant bad habit that goes all throughout to his college years of rocking in his bed and listening to his music. The objects sadari licks throughout his young life as in elementary school include licking light switches, mailboxes, leaves, grass, lightbulbs, outside poles, and licking corners of a metal desk. Other insane tics are touching forehead with shoe or heel, touching windshield with nose, touching desk eight times with nose, and touching the doorknob seven times with each elbow. The habits and or tics that can be considered more or less socially acceptable is the rocking in bed with music, stabbing an outlet with a butter knife and getting up from desk twenty eight times. These are more socially acceptable to my opinion because they are not ridiculous. Typically children during his age, when asked or told not to do something it makes them want to do it more. So the stabbing an outlet with a butter knife can be socially accepted. Also at the age of 5-12 or during elementary school kids have a lot of energy, so sitting still or just sitting typically is asking too much. The rocking in bed while listening to music may just be how he responds to the music he is listening to.
2What are some tics and habits that you have? Are they more socially acceptable than Sedaris? Why do you think that is?
The tics and habits that I have include messing with my hair, spending money on random stuff, cleaning up around the house, drinking lots of water, biting my nails, cleaning my shoes, and buying louis pizza. My habits are more socially acceptable than sedaris. My habits are because compared to licking everything, my habits should be more socially accetable. I think that my habits are more socially acceptable because they have a norm. For instance biting nails is a habit that you can see on daily basis. I think a couple of my habits can be socially unacceptable because less people do it. An example of this would include buying louis pizza. Im not completely sure of this but I assume theirs not a wole lot of people out their who order louis pizza and chezybread like I do. Some of my habits may not actually be habits. These habits or tics are cleaning my shoes, cleaning my apartment, and drinking lots of water. These would be considered not a habit unless I do these habits too much.
3What do you think the point of the essay is to describe and inform the readers Sedaris tics and habits. Also I think the writers point was to describe and inform the readers of his parents, where he lives and the habits in elementary school, middle school, high school, and college. The entire story was about his tics and habits. The name of the story was a plaque of tics. So you can allready assume that the story has to do something with tics. Some examples are on page 8 which says, "It was a short distance from the school to our rented house, no more than six hundred and thirty-seven steps, and on a good day I could make the trip in an pausing every few feet to tongue a mailbox or touch whichever single leaf or blade of grass demanded my attention." When the writer was describing where he lived and where he was living previously, and was describing on page 9 of a plague of tics. The writing says, "I didnt remember things being this way back north. Our family had been transferred from Endicott, New York to Raleigh, North Caralina." For when Sedaris was in elemantary school his habits and tics were mostly licking things. Sedaris and his teacher had a conversation about his licking of the light switch." The purpose of the writing was and inform the readers of Sedaris habits and tics.
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